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În further consideration, there are two more things I would like to point out.
1. At Perry's second attempt with the fish, it is not very clear to the reader what exactly happens. Or at least so it seems to me.
2. At the Squirrel attack part, perhaps you should first mention that Steffan caught fire before you say he stops being on fire.