Okay, first things first. What is a Cirica? :P
| Jammers |
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| I think you mean Circa |
I see now that the story isn't quite entirely done yet or at least it's not entirely shown yet, for we need still the other parts. For the first one I really enjoyed it. I like the writing style of the legend and the interactions between the Druidess and the Barkeep were fun. I am intrigued to see what more you make of them in potential further instalments. Kalaren's commentary was also nice (speaking of which should we add the Stories by RedFireDog caregory?)
For a couple more comments:
-"She was very pretty for one in her 30's, and had long, brunette hair, but alas": The particular sentence I'd say felt somewhat out of place for me in the midst of a legend. Don't know if you attempted an "old tale" writing style at all or if whatever I might have picked up on was unintentional, but this kind of detail seems to go against that somewhat and in general does not feel like something that would be included in a legend. At least that's how it seems to me.
-"University course": Did they even have Universities back then? Though I suppose as part of their oral tradition it wouldn't be unlikely for the tale to have anachronysms, though yet again I am uncertain whether universities and especially uni course selling would be something the Ankorian folks (or whoever they might have heard the story from pre-thedude who might have done it instead) would be prone to add to their stories. Unless of course we just want to chalk it off as PD weirdness. That would indeed be reasonable as perhaps it's the kind of joke you were going for.
-Is she a Druidess or a Witch, though? :P Well, I wouldn't blame the common folk if they can't tell the difference and use both terms, but I suppose there would be some. I will admit a fireball isn't the first thing I would expect out of a Druid, but then again we have not really explored the concept of Druids within Milt. That being said, I am curious to see how the Druidess is portrayed in that regard, outside of legend.
Keep up the good work.