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Finished Act II and I'm loving it. The Heart Attack chapter didn't really affect me that much, in fact I was more concerned when I saw the title than when I actually read the content (also I think you might have gotten something wrong, because there was some fourth-wall-breaking in the next chapter, but none that I saw in that one; unless I'm misunderstanding something). If you had actually allowed Carson to make his escape then and there, I felt fully prepared to find some way to amend the canon, even if it'd be very ridiculous, somehow it didn't seem that wrong. But seems I won't have to after all anyway.

Some miscellaneous notes:

-'âAnd how is she supposed to know what youâre thinking, idiot?â Carson': Carson. Just Carson

-"Speckled Blue Roan Arabian mare": Well it looks like now N_B will have to make another story to explain Arabian mares.

-âTYPHOONâS EEEEEEVIL!â lol that was fantastic

-Is that mayor's name actually Mayor Guy?

-Wait, did Tain just use the Crux curse when he's from Militiregnum?

Okay now let's get onto the big stuff. Firstly, I liked the character of Sara. She's an interesting one who while aligned largely on the same side as the heroes, has her own set of values that set her apart from everyone else and can be cause for a whole set of motivations and conflicts and such. Her fanatic conspiratorial demeanour is interesting, because while it gives her passion it also puts her at a disadvantage. What I find even more interesting down the line is her kind of Lawful-Chaotic Good-Neutral-ish alignment that might feel like it's breaking the D&D alignment rules, but I think makes sense if you think about it. While she's generally good and will help people along, she doesn't ultimately commit to any general goal of betterment of the world aside from what her personal set of values dictate. She helps Tain and Peragrine one day, then helps Carson to their detriment the other. I was a bit surprised by the latter when it first happened, but then realised it makes perfect sense considering how easily she decided to help the former without any real reason to, of course she'd also want to help Carson. This is just my interpretation of course, but technology aside, she seems like the kind of person to seek good in the tree rather than the forest and I find that interesting along with the contrast it makes with Tain.

Secondly, that was some interesting developments with Carson, seeing him being anything other than bored, complaining or sarcastic and more than anything actually capable of making friends. That last one was real surprising, especially considering how little Sara did to earn that. I mean sure she did offer him his freedom, but I didn't take Carson for the kind of guy who's so easily grateful, especially to the point of friendliness. What I really liked, though, was that "No more" part. It's intriguing to get a glimpse in his past and characterisation as well as written quite cleverly. After all was said and done, I was kinda sad to see him go with Tain and Perry again.

Thirdly, okay so while I said I was loving this chapter, I did in fact have some mixed feelings about it. And it's not entirely your fault, it all started with SA, but it's still hard to go through. You have Tain temporarily tie Carson up once when they ''have'' to part with him in order to go into a deadly mission into an enemy base where Carson definitely couldn't and wouldn't want to go and suddenly everyone is treating him like he's into bondage. Of course, Tain wouldn't immediately trust Carson, but what he tells him originally is that he hasn't yet proven that he is to be trusted. He then however goes on and gives him no room to build that trust, treating him awfully and thus giving him no reason to work for that trust. Tain has a certain level of intelligence that I think could allow him to understand that this kind of behaviour would not make him inclined to cooperate. Would his lack of trust pit against his understanding of that win? Maybe it wouldn't lose entirely, but I don't think he'd be so bad, especially after that talk with Perry. And just... it makes me sad to see Carson driven to a corner because Tain is socially awkward and misunderstood.

At the same time though, I understand all the potential putting Tain in that position has. Beyond just a character flaw for him, it creates this very interesting clash of ideals we see in the later chapters of Act II, between Sara and Tain, which could stand to make things less stacked in Sara's favour (because from our perspective knowing that Carson doesn't really intend to rat them out, it looks likes Tain is indeed the one in the wrong; on that note you also make Tain look very paranoid whenever he seems to think that Carson will betray them the moment he looks away considering he knows that's probably a bad choice for Carson and that Carson would know this, too and he's just being cautious because there's just ''some ''chance of betrayal, nothing close to certainty), but still is is rather interesting to read.

On the other hand, this whole ordeal seems to kind of reduce Tain to half of his personality in Act II being "concerned abour Carson and harassing him". Although I've got to say the other half is pretty well done. Except maybe I'm not sure he'd agree to lose so much time on a horse so easily, but he might after a lot of pressure from Perry and Sara, so I guess the result doesn't change that much.

Concerning Peragrine, while always pleasant to read about, I think you should be careful about how you use his magic, because you could end up lessening the feeling of danger the characters have against thedude's forces when you're having him make an explosive getaway from a relatively well-armed and well-manned town, then going back in just as spectacularly and out again, in the span of a couple of days, not getting a scratch on him or his companions.

Finally:<br />Carson.

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